My family just spent one week in Hungary and it was time to go back to London.
First of all, my mom forgot some papers at my aunts house, so we had to go there to get the papers. We stayed there for about an hour. We were all sad when it was time to leave, but we did not want to miss our flight, so we had to leave.
We were getting close to the airport when I noticed that a lot of cars were making a u turn and going back the way we came from. When we got to the front of the line I saw that the road to the airport was closed! So, we followed some cars down another road until we got to a traffic light. Some cars were turning left, right, and some were going straight. We didn't know which way to go so, we just followed the cars going straight. My mom told my dad to put the airports address into the navigation system, but my dad hit the wrong address. I looked around and I noticed that it didn't look like we were heading the right direction, because there were very few cars and it was very quiet. We had been going straight for quite a while now, so my mom pulled over to the side of the road and asked someone the directions to the airport. It turns out that we were going the right way. My mom thanked the stranger and continued down the narrow street. At the next traffic light we turned left and after a few minutes we saw an airplane in the sky.
Before we got the the airport my dad told my sisters and I that we were going to check-in while my mom was going to drop off our rented car.
Two and a half hours later...
We were going to go on the Gatwick Express and we had already bought the tickets. My mom asked someone what platform we had to go to to catch the train to Victoria Station which was in five minutes. The man answered, " Platform five." We turned around and saw my dad on the escalator going down. We had to followed him down. Once we were there we saw that platform five was in a different section! We had two big bags, two hand bags, a big red baby bag, and a pram. We could not climb the stairs back up to platform five, and there was no escalator going up. We looked around and finally found an elevator. We ran to the elevator and pressed the 'Up' button. When we arrived at the main floor we raced across a hallway to another elevator that would take us to platform five and six. I pressed the 'Down' button and the elevator went down. We arrived at platform five one minute before the train left. The doors were closed, because the train was about to leave. A man helped us climb inside.
That was the end of our tiring and exciting trip.
I thought this was an very good story. At the beginning I think you should have written more about you forgot some papers. I am not so sure what tiring means ethire. Lastly, I think there should be more of a bold ending and make the sentences less like a statement and try to add your own personalty into it.Overall, I think you did an amazeing job!
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